TUGAS REVISI WRITING

BEFORE

Industry Music Indonesia

There are many new groups band ai Indonesia. For example D'masiv, Seventeen, Kangen Band, RAN, Alexa etc. They are very popular in our country. Its can be good example to another people who want to make a new band and to be succes. In our country, band is one of activity who most popular. Because, a famous band often publish in television or infotainment show. From this a famous band can get many talk show everywhere ,and also has much money. That fact show that indonesia has many youth active in music. New band is new song is new creativity. Beside new creativity, band also become one of jobs who most popular in our country. So, industr music in Indonesia as like a new job for yourth.

AFTER

Industry music Indonesia

There are many new groups band in Indonesia. For example D' masiv, Seventeen, Kangen Band, RAN, Alexa etc.In our country band is one of activity who most popular. it can be good example for another people who want to make a new band to be success. To be a famous band often show in everywhere like television or infotainment. That fact show in Indonesia has many youth active in music. New band is new song , new song is new creativity.